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Original review author: Chadcomicbro
Webcomic name: Salvadora
Author: Rob, Justin, Melody
Start Date: August 28, 2017
End Date: Ongoing
Genre: Superhero, scifi, cheesecake
Defining Flaw: Cartoon Art, Over exaggerated women, Lack of connecting plot




Rating Summary


Art: Wiki.pngThe art is cartoony, with over exaggerated features to denote "sexiness."
Storyline: Wiki.pngIf there was one to be ascertained. I would guess there are "Arcs" if that could be applied, but none of them are coherent enough to call any of them a true plot beyond "Thicc girl gets superpowers, fights other thicc girls."
Characters: Wiki.pngThe group putting this out tried hard to avoid stereotyping any racial character, while over exploiting the "Big boob" super heroine stereotypes, but with one little dash of a "plain Jane, flat as a board" superheroine. But none of them are particularly noteworthy and have the depth of a drop of water. Appears that they spent more time trying to perfect other areas and forgotten to flesh out any characters beyond them existing and doing things for undocumented reasons.
Miscellaneous Details: Wiki.pngThis could have been a great comic if they worked a little harder on it, instead of copy pasta backgrounds and hyper shallow characters, who have tons of "plot" going for them. But alas this is what lazy is to me. Using an easy cartoon style, and then throwing in teenage boy fantasies. Would have been great without some of that, keeping the sexy would be easier too.
Overall: Wiki.pngI feel after reading this comic and reviewing it, that this thing could be made better if they would plot and plan things better and actually look at what they are doing instead of rushing out steaming piles because the audience demands more posts.



Background

I was poking around a few Webcomic toplist sites when this webcomic came up a few times. After reading the entire comic to the current page, I felt that this review needed to be made.


Downfall

It's inability to choose what it wants to be, a parody or an actual superheroine story or a protest against female depictions in comics.


Story and Plot

This story does contain a lot of "Plot." Copious amounts of plot but as for an actual story, well that's where this comic falls flat. The premise is that a latina college student who is bored with her life, somehow stumbles upon a quite freshly fallen ufo thing, and by jacking a suit that was inside the craft, she becomes a super hero. The main running gag is *gasp* the heroine is roomies with the schools reporter/journalist, who has made it her life's goal to unmask "Salvadora." Despite the panty thin plot, toss in some unexplained random encounters, a villain that has no real reason to be a villain, and the tiny fact that apparently only women in this world can be hero's, well you either get a sexy lesbo superheroine romp, or a thinly veiled feminist propaganda comic. bleh.


Art review

I really wanted this comic to be good, as it has some charming points, but the art style is anime in reverse, over exaggerations of the bust and hips and asses of its female (all characters) and then none at all for the other women in the world to promote a false sense of "diversity." http://salvadoracomic.com/comic/merry-christmas-2017/ The art is cartoony, lending itself almost to taking from Ren and Stimpy in its facial features and expressions. Also to point out a minor fact, one of the superheroines is drawn "smaller" than most of the other superheroines as if to fill in a niche. I wanted to like the art, but its overdone on the Saturday morning cartoon meets maxim magazine feel. It left me feeling kind of confused. Were we supposed to ogle the characters or fetch bowls of cereal and watch the not so exciting adventures of a latina superheroine? Another negative for the art is, it takes 2 people to draw it, one actually drawing it and a another, whom is a lady to assist. I would like to know if she really is Okay with all of this or is she hoping this will pay off sometime for her.


Writing review

I just do not know where to begin. The jokes fall flat, the narrative is soupy at best, and hammy at worst. The whole thing tries to mimic industry comics, but the writing style is the lead weight holding it down. The character interactions need to be reworked, as does the fact that half the bad gal's raison d' etre is not even brought up. If the author is saving them for later, then he is making the wrong bet. Most of the jokes feel forced as if the author is writing them after the panels are done and not before. I'm not expecting Tolstoy or Dickens, but this is not very good. I can be a dick and say things like "my asshole can write a better story than this." But that would not be an insult but stating a fact. The story flow is inconsistent, jumping around to events that are either forgotten, never brought up, or doesn't exist in the first place. "Why does she want to steal the golden statue? Well lets let the audience imagine a reason for it." No. Readers want a reason, because leaving it to our imaginations is a bad, bad writing sin.


Author biography

This comic is written by three people. One artist, one assistant and one author. They have no trouble whoring out their other projects on twitter. Also I feel this comic may be stalled, or possibly being removed in the future as each of the people working on this have other projects to work on.


Conclusion

This comic could actually be better, if they could stop using the cartoon style art, and world of bad puns and odd gag jokes that make things awkward to read. The art does not have to be perfect, but the over exaggerations are nauseating. "Oh look, that hero got thunder thighs and a thicc booty." yawn. Its stale and contrite. Maybe also toning down the hero obsession from the journalist roomie down a few notches. its creepy and the jokes revolving it are way too forced. Using jokes and gags as filler is okay, in small doses, but when you are lost for a plot point or device to move the story along, using gags is old. Like I suggested before, that the panels were drawn without a storyboard is evidenced in the way the story (doesn't) flow. And since the comic is released once a week, they do have time to storyboard. Please Storyboard. Even if they don't change the art, at least write a story flows properly.


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