User:ZenForce

Just a comic enthusiast that also writes fiction when my brain is not a chaos of ideas, which is really strange that not happen. -- List of Reviews:
 * Antibunny
 * Darwin Carmichael is Going to Hell
 * Syd's World

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Rating Summary

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Background
Trying to being serious in a porn comic. Some comic artists it would never cross in their mind doing it, other already done career with that. In this last case, some do it right and/or do it interesting, like Skinny Dip of Funkybun; and other do it wrong, really wrong, like this case.

I remember found this comic in Myhentaigallery. I can't go on with it when appeared the tentacles in the second chapter. Not only because I dislike tentacles, but also because the history is going crazy and without direction. We will what happen here to the webcomic be like this.

Downfall
Around the sixth page we started with the tomfuckery, with the succubus girl using the red shining eyes trope for the foreshadowing.

Story and Plot
Prologue: With an inner monologue and a close up of the medallion we met the two first protagonist: Martin, a heterochromatic doggo boy; and Jessie, a wolf girl with a makeup line in her right cheek of the same color of her hair and eyes, because reasons. Both of them are going to their favorite restaurant for the birthday of the girl. In the way, Martin gives the medallion to the girl, for the birthday present. In the restaurant, we meet their friends and the other two protagonists: Shizuka, a fox girl; and Zu, a dragon boy, and the only reptile we will see in the comic (as I remember). The four talk for a while until we are introduced (in a form not at all subtle way of foreshadowing) to Chandra, a "mongoose" girl that is the waitress of the restaurant. She leaves the menus and informs to the guys that the bar of the restaurant will have and open night. They pass their chatting until the closing time, and then the group invites Chandra to Jessie's apartment. Here we have the first official foreshadowing with Chandra seeing two other girls in an alleyway. In the apartment, Chandra it hints to the group; and seeing that isn't work, she decides to going to the kitchen with the other two girls and show her true colors. After that, Chandra goes to the guys in underwear and also stings them. We finally started the mind control foursome, starting with a forced swinger sex. The four protagonist fuck until they blackout, and Chandra decides to take Jessie with her, in a not discreet way, while the two other girls from before (two wolf girls, to be specific) see how her go. But before she go, she force Shizuka to take the two boys alone, probably for to avoid that they follow her immediately when they snap out. We change of scenery to a port warehouse; Jessie awakes, out of the mind control, naked and confused, until Chandra enters to the building and traps her with tentacles. We come back to Jessie's apartment with light of the morning sun enter the windows, where the Martin, Shizuka and Zu are still unconscious of the threesome of yesterday. They wake up, sore and confused for the rough night; until the dragon notices that the half of the collar that has Martin is shining and say that they can find Jessie with that. We come back to Jessie, which is being raped by the tentacles in every orifice of the body. Chandra for a moment stops the rape and asks for joining their cause. Meanwhile this happens; the three protagonists arrives to warehouse flying that's to the dragon, where they faces the two sister wolfs. While Zu and Shizuka distract the sisters, Martin enters the warehouse, but it's intercepted by Chandra's tentacles. She warns that is too late, because Jessie accepted the proposal. Chandra explains that she search special people for a special mission, that she don't force people to join the group and other shits. She tosses the four guys with a wind force out the warehouse, and flees of the place flying. We end this chapter with four protagonists with some chitchat.

Chapter 1 - Heritage: We are introduced to two twin redhead catgirls chatting a little about the big one going in a journey. She leaves to her little sister a box that belonged to their mother that has a medallion in it (I wonder what type of medallion). Both of them say goodbye and the big sister parts away. The little sister decides to stay awake the night playing Fallout 4, meanwhile Chandra is watching over the apartment, in a not very discrete way like before I have to say. Right now, in the fifth page of the comic, is revealed the name of the big sister is Cocoa. Anyways, we change scenario to a university, where the little sister is talking to a panda girl that apparently is really close friend of hers. The girls decides go to their new job in the library, talking in their way about how creepy is the female librarian is and other things. We arrives to the library, were we are introduced to a familiar face. So between the girls decide that the catgirl (that just in the page 11 we know that her name is Moccha) will take all the Saturday turn of the job. Meanwhile Mocha and her friend say goodbye for the day, Moccha has a really hard headache in the place. Suddenly, a domestic ferret girl called Amarissa (Ama for short) appeared of nowhere and offers her a massage for her headache in flirtatious way. The panda girl appears and interrupts them, so Ama invite both of them to eat pizza to her house, but the panda girl say that she can't go because her mother is expecting her to go home. While this happen, Moccha has a second headache that makes her to go home. She arrives the and instantly lies down in her bed. She apparently has a dream where she ends fucking Ama, until she awakes abruptly. another not discrete foreshadowing while Moccha is showering. She ends ups to decide to go to Ama’s apartment and pop the question, with the same clothes of the dream. When the ferret girl opens the door, purely by chance also have the same clothes of dream. After an awkward chitchat, Ama let get in Moccha to her apartment. While the ferret girl goes to prepare a coffe, the phone of Moccha vibrate just in the exact moment like the dream. In the kitchen, Ama is surprised by Chandra. Apparently, both of the girls are sisters, and talks about a war or something. So Ama makes ups an excuse and Moccha leaves the apartment. Then Chandra says that she has to leave the town and Ama refuses. When the two succubus start a battle for Moccha, casually the catgirl forgot her phone and comes back to get it back. And casually when Ama will attack Chandra, Moccha knocks the door, that deconcentrates her of her spell and get out of control. So to avoid that Moccha find out about her true nature, she pricks her like Chandra did with the other girls of the prologue, and casually this prick triggers a side effect of acute poisoning. So Chandra decides to take Moccha with her to give the antidote, but Ama negates it. We have the "plot twist" that Moccha is descendant of Chandra. Ama finally gives up and let Chandra go with the catgirl. We end this with Moccha awaking in her room, with the panda girl (called Lin, yeah just in the penultimate page knows the name of this girl) sleeping next to her, for some reason, and we are introduced to cervine girl that receives people like this.

Chapter 2 – Crossroads: We start with a little of backtracking to the morning of the same day of the chapter one events. We are introduced to an energetic white fox girl called Holly; she is a traveling actress that wanted to inspect the collection that has the library where Moccha works. She meets with Chandra, and before she goes to search, Holly asks for the direction of esoteric section of library. This surprise Chandra and makes her keep an eye out in her. We back to the present, where the last chapter leaves last time, and Moccha is confused and exalted with the presence of deer girl. Lin informs her that she is called Jennifer, she is an emergency contact and the fire that happen last chapter. Moccha snaps out with the last notice and asks about the state of Ama, Jennifer says that the fire consumed the apartment and Ama's body didn’t appear in two weeks that passed. Moccha ask to be alone, and we found out that she accepted that Jennifer move in to Moccha's apartment. Is obvious that Moccha has memory lapses, since Jennifer re-comfort her with the same sentence that she say in the hospital. Then both girls leave the room and we passed to chapter introduction cover. We jump in to the library's roof, where Chandra calls someone, and then we pass to a wolf boy and an antelope girl having sex. The antelope girl (called Moira) answers the phone and we have a really awkward conversation. Anyways, Chandra asks to meet her in that roof in the next day evening, and we see how Moira absorbs all his energy and leaves the wolf boy unconscious. We jump to morning of the next day, were Moccha is walking in the park, stressed and confused for her memory loss, until she meets with a black fox boy with a scar (called Faolan) that apparently work’s in the Lemon Tree restaurant. Moccha asks to him about the fire, but he answer that she has to ask to her friends. Before Faolan go, Moccha asks if he know Jennifer, and he answer that he saw her twice, but only once with her. We pass scene to a restaurant (the same restaurant of the prologue? Who knows) with Moccha and Jessica talking each together. Jessica mentioned that she is the friend of her sister, but their relationship is complicated and Cocoa never mentioned her to nobody. She also mentioned that she is about to be evicted for not paying the rent. Moccha invited Jessica to her apartament, and at first she refused, but with some insistence of Moccha, she accepted. We jump again to the park again, thinking about what happen in the restaurant, feeling insecure about the situation. Meanwhile is happening this, we pass to the library with Holly meeting Lin, having an awkward conversation, until Lin notes an strange book that Holly, in not very dissimulated way, pretend that is hers. We have a littleof not dissimulated exposition, and we jump to the reunion of Chandra and Moira, where we meet a black feline succubus girl called Schylla (aka Illa), that has a Smalltalk until Moira appears. Illa informs that Ama was relocated in a small town between 50 to 150 miles of the city where they are. Chandra orders to keep an eye in her. Then she asks about what happen with Moccha after the fire. Before anything is said, we jump to her entering to a restaurant; she meets with a cheetah girl and asks her about the incident. At first, she is doubtful about that since she is working, but his boss, a bird boy, she accepts. We jump two nights before the incident, where Jessica, Lin and her toasting before going to the bathroom, like is explained by Moira (we have a "narration of two people at the same time" moment), then she hear Faolan talking outside the bathroom and follow him, and in long story short she fucks the guy because she is liberating her succubus of the inside and absorbs a little of his vital essence. Lin calls Moccha and with Jessica leaves the restaurant, not without a really obvious foreshadowing. The girls go to park and the obvious bad guys follow them and surround them. Jessica says to Moccha to run, then starts an epic fight with the two other girls escaping in the background. Two of the gang guys almost reach the girls, until Moccha decides to tackle one of them and says to Lin to escape. Here is showed why the catgirl has supernatural power, then he runs to the park. Meanwhile the guy with Moccha rips the shirt of her with his knife and having a monologue, until Moccha enters in her succubus form, stabs him and mind control him to get out of there. Moira appear behind her, and Moccha tries to attack her, but failed and Moira make her faint. We are back to Jessica and the rest of the gang, where her is losing the fight, until a humanoid jump of nowhere and probably kills one of the gang. The rest of the gang flees horrifieds, and Faolan founds Moccha and takes her in to the hospital with Jessica. End of the story time. The cheetah girl says that the crazy gang guy killed the rest of the gang. Before her part, Moccha for the phone number of Faolan. We jump to the roof reuninion, where Chandra finds out about that Moira didn't seal her because her wounds. After some melodrama that I don't care, she orders Moira and flies away from there. We jump again to Holly and ask about a seal of the book, and Lin recognizes the last name like the Moccha’s family name. Holly asks for the number of Moccha, and we jump to her trying to call Faolan, but she is really ashamed and stressed with the situation that she is her. We end this chapter with Jessica moving out to Moccha's apartment, until Holly irrupts in it with Lin accompanying her, and everything is happening so fast that Moccha is overloaded mentally and emotionally.

I will not resume the third chapter because is still ongoing, but I guess the story was clear.

Art Review
If we call this comic was made for a boomer, one of the reasons are for the art style. Definitely its looks ripped off from a cartoon of '70s or '80s, making it looking outdated and ugly. The author was hand drawing the art until May 2016, although there not much difference truly. Not only were the drawings are still stiff, but the same figure drawings were used over and over again in the same picture, with minor changes for hair and such. For me, the digital format looks like the author draws a pose and later copy paste what he need for his next drawing. Example:



That is the true mark of bad art.

Like emulating that type of cartoons, the objects tend to disappear from one frame to other. Also, the author has a denotable fetish for legs/thigh/feet, because he will use the minimum excuse to have the major quantity of characters with shorts pants/skirts and barefoot, like this or this. Even if is illogical, like this little girl wanting to go barefoot in the snow, and ends up her tight eaten by the cat.

Oh, and good luck trying to differentiate them, because almost every single character has long hair and the same face. The only ones easy to recognize are the cat, the father (since is the only character that has short hair) and these two color characters. Also, the shitty backgrounds and special effects doesnt help to get a better experience.

Conjugations
Before we talk what is written, we have to talk of HOW it was written. For start, in the comic we have two twin sisters that are French that they are apparently protagonist of other webcomic of the author: Weird Stories from Europe. Well, every time they appear, they speak some machine translated French that sounds like the Chinese Bootleg Star Wars. We take of example this panel.

This is what they are saying:

"Françoise: Je m’ennuie de jouer dans un groupe Michele. On devrait creer notre propre groupe. Vous et moi jouons de la guitare pour que nous puissions changer de rythme et de roles en function de la chanson."

"Michèle: Françoise, nous devrions former notre propre groupe ensemble parce que je veus realizer le reve de nos parents de nous avoir dans le meme groupe ensemble. Nous avons besoin de recruter un bassiste, un batteur et un canteur principal pour obtenir notre reve all-girl band va une fois mon mandate avec les fedoras est terminee. Est-ce que ca ressembe a un plan?"

This is the translation of the author:

"Francoise: I miss playing in a band, Michele. We should start our own group. You and I are guitarists so we can change the rhythm and lead depending on the song."

"Michele: Francoise, we should form our own group because I want to fulfill our parents' dream to see us play in the same band together. We need to recruit a bassist, a drummer, and a vocalist to get our dream of an all-girl band going once my tenure with the Fedoras is over. Does it sound like a plan?"

This is the actual translation of the text:

"Françoise: I'm bored (1) playing in a band, Michele. We should start our own group. Thou (2) and I are guitarists so we can change the rhythm and role (3) depending on the song."

"Michèle: Françoise, we should form our own group because I want to fulfill our parents' dream to have us play in the same band together. We need to recruit a bassist, a drummer, and a chanter to get our all-girl band (4) dream goes once my mandate with the Fedoras is over. Does it sound like a plan? (5)"

(1) "Je m'ennuie de jouer" only means "I'm miss playing" in Québec French. In France French it means "I'm bored playing"

(2) Use of singular "vous" instead of "tu" is too formal for sisters.

(3) The original meaning was "We can alternate between rhythm and lead guitarist" but it became "We can change the rhythm of song and our roles"

(4) Bassist and drummer are in the masculine form and singer has a typo

(5) French language uses space before exclamation point and question mark. And everything sound unnatural.

And this is the more accurate translation of the text:

"F: Ça me manque de jouer dans un groupe, Michèle. On devrait créer notre groupe. Nous sommes guitariste, on échangera entre rythme et solo suivant la chanson."

"M: Françoise, on va former notre propre groupe ensemble parce que je veux réaliser le rêve de nos parents d'être ensemble dans un même groupe. Nous avons besoin de recruter une bassiste, une batteuse et une chanteuse pour faire le girls band de nos rêves une fois mon contrat avec les Fedoras terminé. Ça t'a l'air d'un plan ?"

(Thanks MoebiusStrip for the translate and correction of the dialogue)

And we go on with every panel where the sisters appear. But this problem not only appear translation of one idiom to other, the English dialog also unnatural, like this one. Look at this and tell me this is not dialog that will have two cleverbots talking between them. We also have someone talking Japanese, or more like thinking, and almost certainly that also is bad conjugated too. I have the theory that the author is using an automatic translator and pasting the text without check it, but I have no proof of that.

Panels
If you look at the gallery of the author Deviantart, you will observe that this comic started like a one panel comic, like the majority of the boomer comics, but in January 4, 2021 the author changed the format and put more panels per update. What’s the problem with this? Well, he did it in horizontal format. And he published this version of the webcomic in Webtoons, where obligatorily the format has to be vertical. The result?



Cut off panels, that makes them feel incomplete. I don’t know why the author chooses this webpage to host his comic, but definitely it wasn't the best decision.

Ideologies
First of all, in some way most the events feel like it’s happening in a hippie commune. Why? Not only because almost every character has long hairs and an apparently hate for long pants, but also for the things that happen here. Some of these events: The characters replanting trees because orange man left Paris climate accord, they discuss and think about Rush Limbaugh for at least five pages, discussing about George Floyd crime, protesting about climate change (with a reference of Greta Thunberg), etcetera.

And everyone that is not part of their ideology, it will be demonized and converted in extreme assholes. Some examples are: This two color couple that is extremist Christians that they wish hell for Rush Limbaugh; or this two Fundies that they kick the cast from the beach. But being the principal cast also annoying combined with the same unnatural dialogue, this emotional blackmail doesn't work.

Author biography
Nick Granch (gretzelboy89) is US resident born the 5 of December. In almost every account he has it declares himself like a high-functioning autistic, which will explain some of his little dissimulation of his leg/tight/feet fetish in the comic, he even have a Tumblr account dedicated a ‘70s/’80s models with shorts pants/skirts. Since he created his deviantart account, he created other two webcomics: Tales of a Working Band (2011-2020) and Weird Stories from Europe (2013-2020), but since has almost the same characters from the principal comic, there’s not much difference.

His favorite’s subjects to explore in his work are politics, music and religion, among others themes. He confessed in the comments of this panel that he is catholic, demonstrating it with the description. He’s a supporter of the American Solidarity Party (ASP), a Christian SJW political party that, as what is expected, is Pro-Life. The author also use his webcomic to celebrate or protest certain events, like the International Womens Day or the Asian Lives Matter form March of this year. Good form of protest, by the way, use your characters that has the stereotypical yellow skin and that their personality is being loud, angry, ugly and looks alike is something that will appreciate the Asiatic-Americans.

Conclusion
Since I saw for the first page of this webcomic, I knew will be bad. This webcomic is not worth your time, and doesn’t have repair. If you're a tight fetishist, better look in XXX pages, it's more appealing than everything that offers this comic.

Links

 * Webcomic's Tumblr with only the 2021 comics