Devil's Shine


 * **Original review author:** || DrShaym ||
 * **Webcomic name:** || Devil's Shine ||
 * **Author:** || Amaiya ||
 * **Start Date** || May 11, 2010 ||
 * **End Date** || Ongoing, but hasn't been updated since October 29, 2010 ||
 * **Genre** || Manga, yaoi, porn, horror ||
 * **Defining Flaw** || Pure shock value from the very first page; author doesn't seem to know if it's supposed to be erotic or disturbing ||

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 * Art: || image http://badwebcomics.wdfiles.com/local--files/start/alice.PNG image http://badwebcomics.wdfiles.com/local--files/start/alice.PNG I would consider the art to be competent for the most part, at least as far as animu goes, but every character has the same face and there's almost no distinction between genders. ||
 * Storyline: || image http://badwebcomics.wdfiles.com/local--files/start/alice.PNG image http://badwebcomics.wdfiles.com/local--files/start/alice.PNG The premise has the potential to be interesting, but updates are so sporadic that it's still stuck on the first chapter even after it's been running for 13 months (as of the time of this review). Even though there's only one chapter, it already has numerous plot holes.  The story is also reliant on shock value. ||
 * Characters: || Since the comic never got past it's first chapter, the characters haven't had much time to develop so I can't fairly judge them, so no score given. ||
 * Miscellaneous Details: || image http://badwebcomics.wdfiles.com/local--files/start/alice.PNG The very first fucking page. Keep reading; you'll see. ||
 * Overall: || image http://badwebcomics.wdfiles.com/local--files/start/alice.PNG Jesus Christ... ||

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++ Background

If I recall, I think I first discovered this comic in the "hot & upcoming" list on SmackJeeves. Truth be told, I was actually //looking// for bad comics, and figuring that the most popular comics are probably the most terrible], I was looking at that list. I came across this comic, which had 1300 followers at the time, and sure enough, it was terrible right from page one.

++ Downfall

This comic is terrible right from the first fucking page. Now, some of you who read this site often might think that a lot of these reviews say shit like, "it was bad from the start" or "it was never good", and me saying its downfall is the very first page is unoriginal. Well, none of those comics start like this one.

The very first fucking page shows a woman getting raped. No wait, that's a guy. Oh, and links NSFW, obviously.

++ Story and Plot

div style="width: 300px; border: solid 1px image Demon_Rape_%28Scaled%29.JPG width="300" ^^What a great and erotic way to start a story.^^ /div

The story starts 3000 years after a great flood destroyed all human civilization, and Heaven and Hell have been more-or-less at peace with each other since then. Our main character, a demon named Isen, is basically a sex slave to this other demon named Belial who likes to cut him while fucking him in the ass. But it's okay because demons have magical healing powers. While our hero gets raped, this demon lady walks in to remind Belial that he's supposed to inspect the "breeding program". Belial finishes up and sends Isen to go do the inspection for him.

Isen makes his way to some kind of laboratory where some woman who looks exactly like the other woman tells him about this human Belial had brought down from the "mortal world". He tells her to send her back, using the excuse that she's a "mongrel" and they don't want her to taint the pedigree humans by breeding them. However, the look of shock on his face suggests that he feels compassion for the human, and he's just making excuses to free her.

Okay, so right off the bat, we've established that demons rape each other, use humans for food, and Isen isn't like the other demons. However, what I don't get is that Isen has the authority to release a human and override Belial's orders... but he's still subordinate to him? That doesn't make sense.

Anyway, another demon comes in and tells Isen that Satan himself wants to talk to him. Satan tells Isen that he has a task for him, then Isen asks why he picked him when there are more powerful demons he could use. Satan explains that he can't trust any of the other demons because they're not loyal to him. Yes, the Prince of Darkness apparently can't inspire a little loyalty. Anyway, he tells him about a strange human named Christopher Marley that he wants him to watch, but there will also be angels watching Marley who will kill Isen on sight, making it a rather dangerous mission. On top of that, this Marley guy is apparently capable of killing angels, so both God and Satan see him as a threat, and Isen's mission is to find out what he can about him.

It's also established that Satan apparently has a son whom he hates so much that he'll repeatedly torture anyone who even mentions him. Suddenly, out of nowhere, Satan reaches out and starts molesting Isen. He's also doing this while explaining the details of his extremely important mission and expecting Isen to pay attention. Yeah, I know Isen would probably be punished severely if he screws up the mission, but if this is so damn important, then maybe Satan should, you know, not go out of his way to make him fail.

Anyway, another demon named Tarian comes in, apparently summoned by Satan. Satan partners them together on this mission, even though they fucking hate each other. So much so that they nearly kill each other on their way out the door. It seems that the Lord of Evil is a bit of a dumbass for putting the two together on an assignment this important.

Anyway, they disguise themselves as humans by making their horns disappear, then they teleport to the mortal world and have a shitload of exposition explaining that it was Satan's son who caused the end of the world. They then come across some kind of big, dark fortress, and that's as far as the story has gotten.

++ Art review

div style="width: 300px; border: solid 1px image DevilsShineFacesScaled.JPG width="300" /div

For the most part, the art is fairly competent, at least as far as manga-derivative animu comics go. Amaiya uses dynamic perspectives and seems to have an understanding of how to create atmosphere. There's not much else I can compliment it on.

There are two major flaws. The first is that every character looks the same. Like so many poorly-done manga-wannabe comics, the only way to tell the characters apart is by their hair and clothes. Hell, even that's a stretch because Isen and Tarian have the exact same haircut. The only difference is the color, and Tarian's is slightly messier. If the comic was nothing but linework with no shading, and if they weren't wearing different outfits, you would not be able to tell them apart.

About the only character who has a different face is Satan, who, of course, is nothing //but// a giant face.

You know, there's really no excuse for it. I often hear weeaboos claim that anime is better than Western cartoons because it's "more realistic", but you know what? People in real life don't all have the same face, and I see this shit in webcomics and even professional anime and manga far too often. And it's even worse in a comic like this because //they're demons//. Demons are supernatural creatures. She could have gotten really creative with the character designs, but no. She just draws the same exact figure for every character and slaps different horns on them. That's how she makes demons. Fucking Hell.

She even uses the same figure for both men and women, and that's the second biggest flaw. Now, I understand that this is a yaoi comic and the characters are supposed to be skinny bishonen guys, but I literally could not tell that Isen was a dude until I saw his dick. I'm not kidding, I really thought he was a woman. You fucking fail as an artist if you can't even differentiate between men and women in your art.

Other than that, the one fight scene she drew is incomprehensible due to reliance on close-ups, and the character's horns seem to move around on their heads.

++ Writing review

The writing is where this thing really falls apart. The comic is extremely reliant on exposition to get the story across. So much so that characters have to behave illogically to make vital plot information come up in conversation. For example, when Isen is talking to Satan, he accidentally mentions his son, which apparently enrages Satan so much that if it were anyone else who said it, he would "flay it and leave its raw flesh out for the carrion birds, to be renewed every day for further torment". It's also established that Isen has been with Satan since he first fell from Heaven. So Isen has known Satan since //way back when God first created the universe//, so he should know to be extremely careful not to talk about his son to him, but he does just so the reader will be given some exposition.

Also, the comic is only 40 pages in, but there's already a gigantic plot hole: Satan is apparently a dumbass because this mission is so important that he picks the guy he trusts more than anyone for it, and then threatens the mission by partnering him with a guy whom Isen hates so much that they nearly kill each other. Why does he do that? It's never explained. He just decided that Isen needed a partner, but instead of picking //anyone but Tarian//, he picks Tarian, for no reason. Had the story continued past it's first chapter, I imagine this would lead to them eventually becoming friends or some shit like that, and possibly fucking a few times since this is a yaoi comic, but if Satan wasn't such a moron, this would never happen. This is the type of thing that completely changes the possible outcome of a story.

div style="width: 300px; border: solid 1px image Satan_is_a_Moron_%28Scaled%29.JPG width="300" ^^Satan is a fucking moron.^^ /div

There's also the idea that Isen is the //only// demon that's loyal to Satan. Surely, he wasn't the //only// one with him when he fell from Heaven. I mean, there's got to be millions of demons, and Isen happens to be the only one Satan can trust? What makes Isen so trustworthy anyway? For all of the exposition we get, no indication of Isen's trustworthiness is ever given. In fact, when he shows compassion to the human //in the scene that comes immediately before it//, we get the sense that Satan //can't// trust him because he has a conscience. Is Satan unaware? Isn't he supposed to be omnipotent, or at the very least, really smart? He's known Isen for 14 billion years (or nine thousand if you go by Young Earth Creationist count), and in all that time, he's never had a reason to suspect that Isen has a conscience? Or did Isen just suddenly grow one immediately before the start of the comic?

The comic also relies on shock value. I mean, it starts with a rape scene on the very first page for Christ's sake. Amaiya, what the fuck is wrong with you? Now, I understand that this is, first and foremost, a porn comic, and a yaoi comic no less, but really, there's no need for a rape scene on the very first fucking page. Is this scene supposed to be erotic? A scene of somebody getting fucking stabbed and raped? Who the hell could possibly find that arousing? Well, over 2000 followers on SmackJeeves, apparently. See, that's what I hate about the Internet. Any weirdo with a sick fetish can come on and find at least a few hundred other freaks who'll tell them they're perfectly normal and encourage them.

She probably excuses it by saying, "they're supposed to be in Hell. It's supposed to be disturbing." The fact that this is marked as a yaoi comic, as in, //a gay porn comic//, on SmackJeeves indicates that this is meant to be erotic. Why would you put this in a porn comic? Horror and porn don't mix. And don't give me any of that "plot" bullshit. This scene is entirely unnecessary and has no bearing on the plot at all. If you wanted to establish this guy's role in Hell, there are other ways to go about doing it that are either far sexier or far more disturbing. You can either make it sexy, or you can make it disturbing. You can't do both. This is shock value, pure and simple. You might as well have gone the extra mile and had somebody eat a kitten, or do what Bleedman did and have a cartoon character be responsible for 9/11].

Now, maybe I'm wrong about the whole thing and it isn't supposed to be pornographic at all, and it's all just meant to be disturbing and the fact that the fans leave comments like "Soooo sexy my God XDDDDDD" and "So beautiful and sexy at the same time" is just an accident, but you know what? It pisses me off anyway. I'm sick of all these hack writers who use rape to try to be edgy and shit, like it's some kind of instant ticket to a "dark and dramatic story". I mean, yeah, you can have rape in a story if you use it sparingly, //but don't fucking do it on the first fucking page//.

Now, as for making demons into gay rapists, the idea that most, if not all demons would be gay isn't absurd to me. After all, the Bible does plainly condemn homosexuality, so if Satan embodies everything that's against God, then it makes sense that he would be gay. But again, I have to ask: is this supposed to be erotic? This is a yaoi comic, right? You know, even if I was gay, I certainly wouldn't be turned on by seeing a guy get molested by the hand of the Devil (which looks like a fucking tree branch), especially while intercutting scenes of dismembered angels. Does there really need to be two rape scenes within the first 22 pages?

Really, throwing in a rape scene just for the sake of having one doesn't make your story seem any more disturbing or edgy. It makes it seem stupider, like you're just employing a cheap trick as opposed to creating actual character development. It's like you were sitting there, trying to write a character and thought, "hmm, let's see, how can I make an emotionally disturbed, tragic character? Well, the whole 'witnessed parents murder' thing's been done to death... I know!  Let's have him get raped!  It's both tragic //and sexy!//  Genius!"

While I'm on the topic, I'll also state that this kind of shit trivializes male-on-male rape, which is something that happens in real life, in case you didn't know, and it's just as tragic and traumatizing as male-on-female rape. //This is not the type of thing you should be fingering yourself to//.

++ Author biography

I don't know anything about Amaiya other than she previously started another comic called Red Ribbon, which also has to do with demons, and Devil's Shine is apparently a prequel to it, but she gave up on it after only nine pages and hasn't updated since August of 2009. Why she would start a prequel to something that's only nine pages in is beyond my ability to fathom.

By the way, if you clicked that link, the chick with the red eyes is actually a dude, but you're not surprised, right?

Other than that, just about every comic in her favorites list on her SmackJeeves profile has something to do with yaoi (I'm going by their descriptions; I haven't actually read them, so I could be wrong). I would say that, judging by the types of comics she reads and draws, she's probably a weirdo and a shut-in, but the recent comments section on her profile shows that she hasn't done anything since October of 2010, so I guess she spends more time outside these days. Then again, she could also be dead for all I know.

++ Conclusion

If this were merely a porn comic, I would just roll my eyes and move along. However, this thing is trying to have a deep story about angels and demons and shit, //in a fucking porn comic//. It's a bizarre combination of Biblical mythology and pornography, which don't go together at all. It tries to eroticize rape, which is utterly contemptible and that alone should be enough to earn it a review on this site, but it also has bland, manga-derived art and all of the characters look alike.

As of the time of this review, the comic hasn't been updated in eight months. While I would be happy to find that Amaiya has abandoned this thing, that also shows a lack of dedication and she never even announced any sort of cancellation, so points off for that too.

++ Links


 * The comic itself
 * The comic's SmackJeeves profile
 * Amaiya's SmackJeeves profile